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(Group) text-sensitive play:

 Root issue: repeated conversation of a common fault, falling alternatively on the mother or the son. 

Domestic helper as a perspective, what if they were a parent themselves.


Overview:

 

Mother and Son, an unbroken conversation about love and acceptance.

 

Character sheet:

 

MOTHER

Turned single mother as her child entered marriage, a woman with a temper which tapers off with old age, which is when she loses articulation and does not fight back as much. Protective of her son, but is an anxious avoidant. Abrasive at times and has to establish her level of dominance and strength.


MAID

Offstage, being called for menial tasks only. Employed after father’s death


SON

Nurtured


WIFE

Unseen onstage, only via phone call

 

Chronological Topics:

beginning from the start of real conflict and agency in the son, and ending with the loss of agency in the mother.

 

1. Son’s Puberty (childish)

2. Consoling him after beaten by Father figure (mother’s dating interest of 4 years)

3. Giving Career advice !

4. Disapproving Girlfriend !

5. Son’s Marriage !

6. Daughter in law conflict (wanting kids? Responsibilities?)

7. Fallout (with son, phone calls unanswered)

8. Letter writing (angry) both mother and son?

9. Letter writing (pleading)

10. Letter writing (relaying memories)

11. Old folks home

 

Losing not just the son, but also her core memories of him.



 

ACT 1

Son’s Puberty (childish)

 

Mother is pacing alone on centre stage. Son enters the scene, looks at mother, and freezes.

 

MOTHER: Well.

 

SON: (in a cheery voice) Hi mom, the boys had so much food, we took hours to finish them. I don’t think we ever had so many things

 

Mother stares at son, tight-lipped and without movement.

 

SON: Haha…thank goodness that we have no tomorrow



 

 

MOTHER: You’re not allowed to go until

 

SON:

 

MOTHER:

 

SON:

 

MOTHER:

 

SON: 

 

MOTHER: You said you’d be home by 10

 

SON: (slowly trudging past MOTHER)

 

MOTHER: You said you’d be home by 10

 

SON: that was a month ago!

 

MOTHER: You did not even apologize.

 

SON: I-

 

MOTHER: What made you betray my trust?

 

SON: I’m home, mom. I’m safe. We never

 

MOTHER: No, no, no, no. What did you promise me then?

 

SON:

 

MOTHER:

 

SON:

 

MOTHER:

 

SON:

 

MOTHER: used to be the woman in the son’s life. HUsband didn't give enough for the wife, and she turns her attention to the kid, but she fears losing him.

 

SON:

 

Consoling him after beaten by Father figure

 

MOTHER: He didn't mean it.

 

SON: You want him. I get it. Choose a monster with anger issues over your own son.

 

MOTHER: I don’t think you get this, he’ll never hurt

 

SON: Look what he did to me.

 

 

 

Giving Career advice

Disapproving Girlfriend

Son’s Marriage

Daughter in law conflict (wanting kids? Responsibilities?)

Fallout (with son, phone calls unanswered) son cut contact to preserve his family’s peace,

Letter writing (angry) son reading mail, still helps mom on the side, sending handymen, making sure aunties help out his mom, neighbours etc.

Letter writing (pleading)

Letter writing (relaying memories)

Old folks home

 



s home…

our birthplace? 

the workspace? 

where our feet take us?

in a land we’ve never been to?

just a box we return to every night?

somewhere we can really be ourselves?

on Facebook, Twitter or Instagram? 

merely a state of mind? 

All or none of the above? 












Woman Brutally Murdered in a Brothel


Setting: Malaysian future. Brickfields.  


A girl named was brutally murdered in a hotel room at 3:52 am on a Friday morning. She was a successful University student with a PHD in Civil Engineering. None of her family members were aware of her service in the prostitution industry. Her family members were shocked to find out about her death as well as her working in a brothel. Everyone had the 





CHARACTERS

mother

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father

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Ashwinder

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Goody


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OBITUARY


Our beloved daughter ‘Goody’ Gudiprit Kaur has passed away early in the morning as of 31 August 2035 after a few years of battling with mental trauma.


Gudiprit was born with her twin brother in 2005, and was a bright, determined child that was the light and life of our family. She had always found an interest in complex mechanical puzzles, winning multiple awards ever since her junior years. She had a dream of becoming an engineer that will someday significantly contribute to the society’s mechanical infrastructure, and has achieved several steps in realising her dream with the Kong Engineering Foundation and other external sponsors. After completing her PhD in civil engineering at the age of 26, she progressed into freelancing work in tangent to companies such as Lazarus.co and Machin∞. It is a true loss that her full strength and potential had no chance to flourish according to what she would have wanted. 


In memory of Goody, we have created a donation forum to support and improve the quality of research for young creative minds in Malaysia. The wake and funeral services are private events, and individual invitations will be sent out separately due to SOP measures.



Inciting incident (1-2 pages, submitted to Dr Sheena by Tuesday, 4pm)


Time: after my sister's body is discovered, texting parents in the police station while policemen are investigating the crime scene. Window of time after he is called in and before he gets investigated. Ends with him going into the investigation room, and a flood of messages from parents that are unanswered. FATHER sends in the news at 8am in the morning.
Whatsapp messages between twin brother and parents (twin brother confronting parents about sister’s death and sex work, then end with news about sister’s death on the news/TV)


DIGITAL TEXT:


BROTHER [7:34pm]:

Appa amma 

Goody died. 

Don’t panic first. Let me explain


MOTHER [7:36pm]: 

Magan stop fooling around

I call you now


[Missed voice call at 7:36pm]


FATHER [7:36pm]

Hello, thank you for your call. I am not here right now, but will call you back ASAP. 


[Missed voice call at 7:36pm]

[Missed voice call at 7:37pm]

[Missed voice call at 7:38pm]

[Missed voice call at 7:40pm]

[Missed voice call at 7:42pm]

[Missed voice call at 7:43pm]


BROTHER [7:46PM] 

Wait… 


MOTHER [7:47pm]

Stop texting. Pick up my call now. 😡


[Missed voice call at 7:47pm


BROTHER [7:47pm]

I can’t. Am at the police station now 


MOTHER [7:56pm]

Police station? Why are you at the police station???


BROTHER [8:00pm]

The police found her 

So they called me


MOTHER [8:00pm]

Where

Is she safe? Did they take care of her?

Go see her and bring her home.


BROTHER [8:02pm]

Amma, they found her dead body 

She’s still at the scene


MOTHER [8:04pm]

What scene? Magan, tell us the truth now. 


BROTHER [8:04pm]

Ma I will tell u everything


MOTHER [8:04pm]

Stop lying.

Why didn't the police call us first??? 


BROTHER [8:04pm]

in due time when the police get in touch with you


MOTHER [8:05pm]

Where is she?


BROTHER [8:05 pm]

I never saw her before the police called me


MOTHER [8:06pm]

STOP LYING WHERE IS SHE


BROTHER [8:07pm]

The police found her at 

her workplace

Still investigating


MOTHER [8:08pm]

No

Goody quit Lazarus last month.


BROTHER [8:08pm]

It’s not Lazarus or Machin∞

She had another job


MOTHER [8:12pm]

Where is she now, Ashwinder

Stop making excuses and explain

Ashwinder


MOTHER [8:14pm]

ASHWINDER


[Missed voice call at 8:14pm]


FATHER [00:06am]
@Ashwinder answer your mother.


FATHER [00:08am]
@Ashwinder where are you.


FATHER [8:00am]
“BREAKING NEWS: 30 year old prostitute was found dead on the fourth floor of a brothel along Brickfields.”


@Ashwinder is this your sister.


EVIDENCE



DIALOGUE:



*Disclaimer: The indented texts are digitally sent, and will be performed with audio cues. All time-stamps are shown as examples; an approximate indication of time lapsed between readings and replies.


(BROTHER is waiting nervously in the detainment area of the police station. Busy uniformed workers walk past him without stopping, while giving him pressuring details regarding the case.) 


UNIFORM 1: (arrives) Wash your hands here. Sanitise here. (leaves)


UNIFORM 2: (arrives and hands BROTHER a bottle of water) We will return your belongings when the procedure is complete (leaves).


BROTHER: (shouting anxiously after UNIFORM 2) Did you find her?


UNIFORM 1: (arrives behind BROTHER, offers a red print-pad) Your right thumb, here.


BROTHER: (disoriented) My sister… Was it her that they found? I was just there to take care of her, I… 


UNIFORM 2: (arrives stage right ) You have the right to stay silent, you know. Please sign here. (places a pen in BROTHER’S hands)


BROTHER: Why do I need to sign this if I'm innocent?

UNIFORM 1: (pedantically) You are guilty when there is evidence. Clearly, you know the business that goes about…in these circles. It’s much better for you—in your interest, to sign these papers before you get tangled up in something worse. The ink is drying.

BROTHER: I want to know if my sister is safe, please.

UNIFORM 2: (passing by) We will contact her next of kin shortly.

(Brother struck dumb, with shaking fingers, he signs, and the uniforms leave. He begins to type, lights out, with the sound of typing continuing, and comes back on when he presses send.)

(Parents on-stage, hotel room. FATHER in an online meeting, focusing on his laptop facing away from the audience; MOTHER is texting son, BROTHER, who is off-stage.)


BROTHER [7:34pm]:

Appa amma 

Goody died. 

Don’t panic first. Let me explain


MOTHER: Appa. Appa! Did you see? Ashwinder is in the groupchat! 

Appa! (goes to FATHER and taps him on the shoulder)


FATHER: Shh, shh. 


MOTHER: (slaps his shoulder with each point) ​​When was the last time your son contacted you? When was the last time you’ve talked to him? Appa, come on! You don’t need to be in this conference meeting right?


FATHER: (flinches, and pushes her away without really listening to her) Can you deal with it, I'm in a meeting (mutes and flips his phone down)


MOTHER: (expresses frustration before returning her focus on her phone. The screen lights up again as she types) Dei, Ash! Why you never pick up our calls! (pauses before typing) Let me try calling Goody. (calls Goody) Dei, she’s not picking up either! (texts BROTHER.)


MOTHER [7:36pm]: 

Magan stop fooling around

Why you never pick up our calls

Call me now


(MOTHER calls but BROTHER does not pick up. Missed call sound cue. MOTHER's eyes dart around the room erratically. )


FATHER [7:36pm]

[automated] Hello, thank you for your call. I am not here right now, but will call you back ASAP. 


FATHER: (turns around to mother, who nods at him) Please. I’m in a conference right now. Can you go to the balcony?


(MOTHER goes to the balcony, but leaves the balcony door open so that she can fill her husband in on Ashwinder.)


MOTHER: Hello, Ash? Hello?


(MOTHER calls three times. Missed call sound cues three times.) 


MOTHER: Pick up. Pickup, pickup useless boy! What are you doing at this time?! Hello!


(MOTHER tries to call another time. Missed call sound cue.)


MOTHER: AISH! Why this boy not picking up his bloody phone! 


(MOTHER tries to call another time. Missed call sound cue.)



BROTHER [7:46PM] 

Wait la, I’m trying to tell you


(MOTHER stands up and starts pacing while typing.)

 

MOTHER [7:47pm]

Stop texting. Pick up my call now. 😡


(MOTHER tries to call another time. Missed call sound cue.)


BROTHER [7:47pm]

I can’t. Am at the police station now 


MOTHER [7:56pm]

Police station? Why are you at the police station???


MOTHER: Police station! Appa, he is at the police station! Aish this boy always up to trouble I tell you. Especially after he moved out. Next thing you know, he’ll be asking for money!


(FATHER waves her away and taps his earpiece.)


MOTHER: You’re not helping! Work, work, work! Only know how to work! Now got emergency- our kids in trouble! Still work!


BROTHER [8:00pm]

The police found her 

So they called me 


MOTHER: Oh my god… police? Appa! They are with the police! Goody is with the police!


MOTHER [8:00pm]

Where

Is she safe? Did they take care of her?

Go see her and bring her home.


BROTHER [8:02pm]

Amma, they found her dead body 

She’s still at the scene


(FATHER removes his earpiece abruptly and pushes back from the table in shock. His face is deathly pale.)


FATHER: Hai Ram... 


(MOTHER looks shocked, speechless, and sits down.)


FATHER: Why so surprised? I checked the chat.


(MOTHER furiously types.)


MOTHER [8:04pm]

What scene? Magan, tell us the truth now. 


BROTHER [8:04pm]

Ma I will tell u erytging


MOTHER [8:04pm] 

Stop lying. 

Why didn't the police call us first??? 


MOTHER: Appa, did the police call you?


FATHER: No-

 

BROTHER [8:04pm]

in due time when the police get in touch with you


MOTHER [8:05pm]

Where is she?


BROTHER [8:05 pm]

I never saw her before the police called me


MOTHER [8:06pm]

STOP LYING WHERE IS SHE


BROTHER [8:07pm]

The police found her at…her workplace…Still investigating


MOTHER: Appa… (Breathes heavily.) Appa! Please look at your child now- No, no, no, what is this… 


MOTHER [8:08pm]

No

Goody quit Lazarus last month.


BROTHER [8:08pm]

It’s not Lazarus or Machin∞

She had another job


MOTHER: What is this boy saying…


MOTHER [8:12pm]

Where is she now, Ashwinder

Stop making excuses and explain

Ashwinder


MOTHER: Appa talk to your son! He listens to you.


MOTHER [8:14pm]

ASHWINDER


(MOTHER tries to call another time. Missed call sound cue.)


MOTHER: Appa! Now!


(FATHER closes his laptop and glares at MOTHER, but texts BROTHER.)


FATHER [00:06am]
@Ashwinder answer your mother.


MOTHER: Ah now you start caring. See? Now your son not responding already.


FATHER [00:08am]
@Ashwinder where are you.


(FATHER and MOTHER stop texting after their son clearly isn’t responding. Both of them are in a state of shock, still processing the situation they are in. FATHER is sitting down on the couch while MOTHER is standing.)


MOTHER: This would not have happened if you had paid more attention to them. Look at them now. Our own son acts like we’re strangers! And Goody- Goody…


FATHER: You want to point fingers now?! Our daughter quit her job and has been up to god knows what. And now she’s possibly… We won’t- We won’t talk about that now. Not when we don’t have all the answers yet. 


MOTHER: If we don’t talk about it now, then WHEN are we going to talk about it?! You never pay attention to our children- You never pay attention to us!


FATHER: (stands up and points at MOTHER.) But that’s YOUR responsibility! I break my back at work every day- everything I do, is for our family! YOU were supposed to look after our children. YOU were supposed to make sure they both succeed. But look at them now! Look what happened! And now you blame me?!


MOTHER: Yes I blame you! If you were around more often, Goody will know there’s someone other than me who expects great things from her! You think I don’t know our daughter? She thinks all I want is to brag to people about her achievements! She thinks I put pressure on her just to make her miserable! And Ashwinder- Useless boy! He looks up to you and you just- 


FATHER: (Interjects.) ME? You just let him be! You never watch out for that boy’s studies or career path-


MOTHER: (Talks over father.) But you only care about Goody. If you were home more often, I could’ve looked after Goody and you could’ve looked after Ash- Then neither of our children would... 


FATHER: (Interjects with a louder voice.) I'LL tell you the problem. The problem is YOU are too overbearing towards Goody and neglected Ashwinder!


MOTHER: SO ARE YOU! If you aren’t busy with work, you’re busy talking to Goody about her studies and her job! And Ashwinder-  (Chokes on her words and tears her head away guiltily, face scrunching up in pain.)


(Tensed silence fills the room. FATHER and MOTHER face away from each other, a significant distance separating them.)


The TV blares, interrupting them: “BREAKING NEWS: 30 year old prostitute was found dead on the fourth floor of a hotel along Brickfields.” (Off stage, the announcer reads this aloud.)


(Father and mother stop and all emotion drains from their faces as they both stare at the TV. They say nothing, slowly walk out as funeral music starts playing.)


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